Comments on "Modern Slavery" Essays

I really enjoyed reading everyone's essays this week. Opinions were disputed and passions were expressed. So far, this has been my favorite week for essay readings and commentary.

Christina:

Great opening! You really drew me in by making your paper personal and discussing your cute pup. I would have been interested to read more examples of specific testing done on animals that is harmful, however, the end of your paper was incredible when you discussed social justification and the sacrifices any human would naturally make despite how it might affect the animal. It put animal testing into a different perspective and I really enjoyed reading it.

Daniel:

Great title, very catchy. I agree with many of your ideas, especially welfare, but would have liked to see concrete examples to support your opinion. I for one, would like to know why the government will back up huge car companies and bring them out of “debt” while restrictions are put on small businesses. I do however, disagree with your war opinion. I think it is great that the government offers to pay for your college if you join the ROTC and enlist to serve. It is for this very reason, that my boyfriend is able to attend VCU and be debt free after college. In my opinion, the government is making you work for your money and make some sacrifices instead of just handing money to you as in welfare. Overall, great paper, just go back and do a little grammar editing this for this week’s assignment : )

Kara:

I would have liked to see a more specific topic for your paper, but it was very persuasive and interesting to read from a broader perspective. It provided me with understanding as to why people do not fight against the slave system, “they keep working for fear of their lives and the lives of loved ones and even though their forced labor may be tiresome and possibly life threatening tasks, they continue to work rather than be beaten by their employer.” I also enjoyed how you took it from a more personal and everyday perspective stating that “free citizens can also be slaves to certain things.” I found this idea very intriguing, and the more I read, the more I agreed.

Aubrey:

I couldn’t agree with your idea that money is the root of all evil and people will do anything for it. So sad, yet so true. I would have liked to see you take your paper a bit farther, such as suggesting that it is because of the desire for money, that lead people to commit inhume acts such as forcing others to work in sweatshops for very little income.