Since I have not commented on everyone’s blog essays for the past 3 weeks, I have decided to combine the comments into 1 post for easier reading purposes.
Kara:
I think you did an excellent job answering the questions concerning civil disobediance and I agree with everything you said. I like how you stated your opinion but would have liked to see you state an opinion about a slavery issue. Overall, I thought your essay was well written.
I really liked how you based your virtues off of Franklin’s virtues, but explained what they meant to you personally. I think Franklin was very wise and his virtues are something we should all live up to. And you are doing a great job trying to improve your industry virtue. I saw you applying to colleges and I think its great that you are thinking ahead into the future. You are very smart and will go far! : D
Daniel:
You do an excellent job of getting your point across in your essays. When I read your opening line to week 10, stating that you feel Americans should not be expected to show any form of allegiance to their country, my mouth dropped and I immediately began thinking of a defense….until I read your essay. I completely agree with your idea that these days, the government runs the people more than the people run the government. And that goes against what our nation was founded on, by the people, for the people.
You are a very opinionated person and have some ideas that I agree and do agree with, but either way, you state your ideas openly and do not shy away from sharing them, and I strongly admire this trait. I personally believe that we should keep the declaration as it is, because if someone were to even attempt to change it, they would probably screw it up. I only say this because there are so many diverse ideas, and I truly believe in the principles this nation was founded on, and someone wanting to revamp the declaration, I feel, would take away/change the principles and butcher it.
Ps- Cool story about your trip to 14th and Cary. It’s crazy how much you look like my brother!
Christina:
I think your solutions essay is one of your best yet. I absolutely love how you use the John Brown example from slave times and tie it into your solutions. I completely agree with you on every point, even the point about medical field animal testing. I think awareness is a huge solution too, because the more people know, the more they may or may not use a product. I know I wouldn’t.
Smart idea highlighting changes and additions in bold. Your paragraph in which you relate and understand Emerson’s and Thoreau’s ideas actually helped me understand their ideas even better. It was very eye-opening and insightful. Great revision!
Your virtue essay was a very interesting read and I admire (and will implement for my own use) the idea to record everything, especially the reasons behind why something wasn’t done, like going to the gym. I think every person naturally struggles with bodily responsibility and I think my main reason for being irresponsible with it is time management. But it is something that every American NEEDS to make time for, because it can be life saving. My boyfriend is doing a presentation right now called “Health is Wealth” and he discusses how important exercise and diet are in our lives, because the things we do now will be reflected in and on our body later.
Also, your portfolio is incredible! I am in love with the picture on your home page! How were you able to create the separate webpage? It’s a great idea!
Aubrey:
Your paper was an interesting read in contrast to Daniel’s paper in week 10. I enjoyed reading the things America has done for us, such as offering protection. I agree whole-heartedly with your ideas on moral and civil law and think that during slavery, these laws were selfishly ignored for the bettering of the white man. It’s incredible to see how far our country has come, yet at the same time, how much we have fallen.
You have constructed a great list of virtues. Which one to you think you need to develop the most?
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